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Author: rob <rob@tarina.org>
Date: Fri, 25 Nov 2022 15:33:40 +0200
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@@ -55,25 +55,25 @@ All loving!
All livin
and lovin
Rights.
-yeaaah broo!
+yeaaah bruu
Coder turn around looking where he came from, still walking. No body there.
Still walking
CODER
-Oh yeah, oh yeah baby oh, yeah, yeah, ya wanna get real real serious with me, okidoki lady, first of all, honey, you better get in the garden with me and ill show you my cock and my chicken maybe we can hang out in the garden house? try out one of those low dangling red tomatos. thy redy lookin real red and tasty. we make salsa? chili. is that ok to you my special? oh yeah my babyyy. oh good! Only for you! My special darling. My dear. Beloved. Everything. Heart And Soul.
+Oh yeah, oh yeah baby oh, yeah, yeah, ya wanna get real real serious with me, okidoki lady, first of all, honey, you better get in my garden with me and ill show you my cockerrr the most jack sparrow of a rooster and my chicken, we can hang out in the garden house try out one of those low dangling red tomatos. They ready lookin real red and tasty. we make salsa? got some of those round hot chili. is that ok to you my special? oh yeah my babyyy. oh good! Only for you! My special darling. My dear. Beloved. Everything. Heart And Soul.
Coder still walking.
CODER
-When are we ever luckiest as human beings? Are we ever gonna be fully happie?? fully satisfied??
+When are we ever luckiest? Are we ever gonna be fully happie?? fully satisfied??
CODER
-Ladies and gentlemen let me present you the power of the mind. connect. Set mindset too lucky! it is in everything. and In and around you. Lucky, lucky, lucky, lucky
+Ladies and gentlemen let me present you the power of the mind. connect. Set mindset too lucky! it is in everything. In and around you. Lucky, lucky, lucky, lucky
CODER
-I grew up and thought I had some purpuse in this. thanks. What the hell whas it all about. Goin to mars?
+I grew up and thought I had some purpuse in this. thanks. What the hell whas it all about. Goin to mars? naaa...
Sound. Low sound.
@@ -90,124 +90,317 @@ A Deer chillin in the dark blue woods walking on the snow. Finding things to eat
Deer run away cuz someone comming. There's a road nearby. A rusty old van drives past us on the road.
-INT. FAMILY HOME
+The van it drives right at us and park right in front of us.
-, it drives right at us and park right in front of us.
-
-It's cold outside. The van is steaming. Left van dor opens. CLOSE UP. tobacco butts fall out. A BIG GUY climbs out of the seat. Walks to the Van sidedoor and open it. CLOSE UP lot of different guns in the van.
+It's cold outside. The van is steaming. Left van door opens. CLOSE UP. tobacco butts fall out with some used needles. A BIG GUY climbs out of the left front seat. Walks to the Van sidedoor and open it.
Right door opens. UGLY JAMES BOND VILLAIN jump out. HE go straight to the back of the van. He open back door of van, Two more guys jump out. BADGUY1 and BADGUY2, lookin like the go on a mission.
-UGGLY JAMES BOND VILLAIN
-Now this is an easy one. Lock and load.
+CLOSE UP lot of different guns in the van.
-Badguy1 is standing and lookin at the a thi
+Some start loading em guns.
-BADGUY1
+Ugly James Bond Villain looks past the camera.
+UGGLY JAMES BOND VILLAIN
+It is going to be an easy one. Both houses in and out.
+We see a picture of two houses near each other. On a hill. A road connecting the houses upon the hill. THere's a cementary on the other side of the road. We look where road goes. There's a van comming. The rusty old van.
INT. FAMILY TV ROOM
-FATHER, MOTHER, SON, DOTTER watchin TV. They watch a movie.
+FATHER, MOTHER, SON, DOTTER watchin TV. They sitting in a sofa watching this small tv screen. They watch Mononoke. The scene making our hero ready to go out watchin the world with unclouded eyes. They have a fireplace and there's a fire goin.
FATHER
(Obama voice)
-Ok, now we need to check the news. It on now. We can then continue with the movie.
+Ok, now we need to check the news. It on now. We can then continue with the movie later.
+
+He stop movie. Boy and Girl sighs. They are about to go away, leave their laid back positions.
+
+FATHER
+No, no don't raise up. don't go, this is family time. We doin it together. This will only take couple of minutes and you learn something very new that your life could depend on.
+
+FATHER
+Now I want you kids to see the real world. So you'd grow up in the real world and know what to do in the real world. Now what do you do in the real world?
+
+BOY
+You go to moon.
-He stop movie. Boy and Girl and mother sighs.
+SISTER
+You do something valuable for you and others around you.
FATHER
-you gotta know what is going on in the world around you.
+Good answer. Now lets watch the news for couple minutes, ok.
Tv swithes channel to the 9pm news. 9pm Tv News anchor turns around in the dark. Light come on.
9PM TV NEWS ANCHOR
-Welcome to 9pm News. There's been another murder. It's confirmed that Mr. Monopolo family is dead.
+Welcome to 9pm News. There's been another murder near the small town of Purple Lilly. It's confirmed that the tragedy took place last night at around 10-11pm, another family gone in these brutal series of murders.
We see house of Mr. Monopolo man. Police and Ambulance lights. Bodies are carried out on stretchers with white blankets on them by firemen. They lay the bodies on stretchers outside the house and go in to get more bodies.
REPORTER
-The murder took place here at their home in their home village. We asked a neighbour if they heard anythin unusual around 3am when the murder took place.
+The murder took place here at their home in their home village close by the town of Purple Lilly. We asked a neighbour if they heard anythin unusual around 3am when the murder took place.
Neighbour chewing gum.
NEIGHBOUR
wow, am I like on the tv news now. wow. naa I aint heard shiit but grounge whole night me an my homies we playin Louuuud I aint hearin but constant ringing. Like this.
-DOes this white noise thing sound.
+He does this white noise thing sound. Sounds awful.
NEIGHBOUR
-wooow! (get sentimental) you real fine looking lady, you are a beautiful woman you know that. Speak to me. I love to hear you speak to me
+wooow! (get sentimental) you real fine looking lady,
+(looking at reporter)
+you are a beautiful woman you know that. Speak to me. I love to hear you speak to me
Neighbour turns to the camera.
NEIGHBOUR
-Yeeee, yeee, yee!! ssup everyboody!
+Yeeee, yeee, yee!! sup everyboody!
Neigbour turns back to Reporter.
NEIGHBOUR
-Naa, na, I meen, I understand these killers go after the ones owning somthin, right? He, rest in peace my neighbour and his whole family, he was a like a brother to me, he really was a good guy you know, helped everybodi in this community, help gro good food. I gonna miss him a lot. He had a lot of laand you know. That's why they came after him. It aint right, iit aint right. This shit is noot right.
+Naa, na, I meen, I understand these killers go after the ones owning somthin, right? He, rest in peace my neighbour and his whole family, he was a like a brother to me, he really was a good guy you know, helped everybodi in this community, help gro good food. He knew lot of useful stuff. What to do with pest, bugs and shit. He said naa, it is a paradise for the good guys. They gonna eat all those bad bug motherfuckers. He legend around here you know. I gonna miss him a lot. He got lot of good guitar riffs and licks. Sometime we played together. He had lot of laand you know. That's why they came after him. It aint right, iit aint right. This shit is noot right. You know what lady. Come with me I show you my bar at my place. I make some ooown home breew. Please. Come for one. It's on the house.
Father shut of the TV.
Mother and dotter looking terrified of what they just saw in the news.
MOTHER
-Should we call someone?
+Now we could have had a nice evenin without knowing that.
FATHER
-You know what. Let's shut the TV for tonite.
+Yeah. You're absolutely right. Ok, kids its bedtime.
-The boy is playin with somethin. He too young to understand.
+GIRL
+What if they come here dad to our house. Dad.
-EXT. SHED AND HOUSE
+FATHER
+No, they wont.
+
+GIRL
+How you so sure dad?
+
+FATHER
+cause they wont come here.
-SCANVENGERs pick up an axe, shovel, and other tools from the shed. They walk to the big lit window of the house. We see the family trough the window.
+MOTHER
+You heard your father, now you to go wash your teeth, I come tok you in and read you a good night story.
+
+BOY
+Yeeee. I want you to read the story with the wizzard.
+
+MOTHER
+Now, go brush your teeth.
+
+The kids run upstairs.
+
+EXT. TWO HOUSES
+
+The van is parked at the first house. We see gun shots inside house. They using silencers. THey come out. Some from back some from main door. They leave main door open. There's a dead body laying on the floor. Bad guys get back to the parked van. They reload.
INT. HOUSE
-The Father notices something is up. He got a HUnch. He looks to the window. We hear the Window crash. SMACK. Bad guys come in from window.
+Kids brush teeth. Boy is ready. Spit out, drink water, put toothbrush back and run away from mirror and sink. Girl still brushin her teeth.
+
+BOY
+(O.S)
+I'm reeaaadyyyy.
+
+INT. FAMILY TV ROOM
+
+Father and Mother still in sofa.
+
+MOTHER
+(crying)
+What's happening with the world. What's goin oon?
+
+Father hugs Mother.
+
+FATHER
+Don't you worry. We gonna be fine. I promise. We gonna be just fine.
+
+BOY
+(O.S)
+Maaaaaaam! I'm reeeaaadyyy!
+
+Mother brushes her tear away and Mother and Father kisses. Mother then leave to go read for the kids.
+
+EXT. SHED AND HOUSE
+
+Bad guys POV. We see in the window from the outside mother leave dad in tv room. She go in other room. Kids room.
+
+Bad guys standing at this shed.
+
+BAD GUY
+You know I'm gonna save some bullets on this one.
+
+Bad guy leave hi silencer gun against the shed wall and pick up the nearby axe.
+
+BAD GUY2
+Ok, I'm in that to maan.
+
+BAD BUY2 leave his gun and take a showel.
+
+Bad guys walk to the big lit window of the house.
+
+INT. TV ROOM
+
+The Father notices something is up. He got a HUnch. He looks to the window.
+
+Father goes to the kid room.
+
+INT. KIDS ROOM
+
+FATHER
+Hey, why dont we all sleep upstair tonight. It's warmer there. Feels a little cold in this room.
+
+BOY
+WYeee!!
+
+The boy run out of room and upstair with pillow and a blanket. Mother sitting in a chair. She was about to read from a book. Father kisses Mother on head. She smiles while shakin her head.
+
+INT. STAIRS
+
+Girl go up the stairs with pillow and blanket. CLOSE UP her feet. Walking up stairs. Slo-mo.
+
+EXT. HOUSE
+
+Slo-mo. CLOSE UP a sledge hammer from front. From behind. Bad Guy give it full swing. It's going to go through the window.
+
+INT. KIDS ROOM
+
+CLOSE UP Dad looks out the window. It's just piched black out there. He start running for the mother who is now gettin outta the kids room. Into TV room. We see the sledge hammer on the outside just about to hit the window, TV room window. Mother is entering the room. Slo-mo.
+
+CLOSE UP Father face. slo-mooo.
+
+FATHER
+NoooooO1! Get Down!
+
+CLOSE UP window crash. Glass is flying. The sledge hammer still flying into the TV room.
+
+CLOSE UP Father grips mothers hand. So grippingly that she does a tango move. She swing around and then lift her hand. LOokin serious in Father eyse. Father still holding her hand and make her follow him into the TV room, they run on the floor, where the sledgehammer is now sliding and bouncing on against the fireplace.
+
+Father looking at floor. Shit all fucked up with glass. He turn around. He see bad guys on the outside of the window coming in. Slo-mo. Bad guys. Raising up their two guns, an axe, and a shovel.
+
+CLOSE UP father does this kung foo move with his feet to clean away the glas for Mother.
+
+INT. STAIRS
+
+They get into the stairs from downstair TV room.
+
+We hear bad guy walking on the glass on the floor in TV room, CLOSE UP Father sliced he foot on the glas a little bit.
+
+The girl is upstairs and knows where fathers shotgun is at. She opens a secret drawer. The girl run and throw shotgun to father down the stairs. She run some more and throw a belt with shells. Father pumping shotgun standing down the stairs half way down. He put belt with shells on over his shoulder. Mother is behind him. Father goes to see what up with his shotgun up. FATHER POV. FATHER CLOSE UP. Goin down the stairs. Slowly.
FATHER
(shouting)
Go! RUN!
-The girl run to another room upstairs and knows where his fathers shotgun is at. She opens a secret drawer. The girl throw shotgun to father in the middle down the stairs. She throw a belt with shells. Father pumping shotgun standing down the stairs half way down. He put belt with shells on over his shoulder. We see him looking at the two walls leading to the TV room the mother and boy is still at. Father goes to see what up with his shotgun up. FATHER POV. FATHER CLOSE UP. Goin down the stairs. Slowly.
-
-The girl take a knife from secret drawer. She also start go down the stair. CLOSE UP. feet. CLOSE UP girl with knife. BAD ASS MOTHERFUCKING MUSIC. The Thing and Rammstein mashup.
+The girl take a knife from secret drawer. The boy is upstair looking at sister going down. CLOSE UP. feet. CLOSE UP girl with knife. BAD ASS MOTHERFUCKING MUSIC. The Thing and Rammstein mashup.
-CLOSE UP dad down stair, still taking cover from the wall looking at broken window. SHit fuck where are they. Fuck what if they got mi lady and son? I fucked up. Ok. Take it easy. I got my shotgun. He look at his girl coming down in the stairs with a knife.
+CLOSE UP dad down stair, still taking cover from the wall looking at broken window. Looking at the sledghammer. WTF?! SHit fuck where are they. Ok. Take it easy. I got my shotgun. He look at his woman and girl coming down in the stairs with a knife.
FATHER
just stay there ok.
-Dad is going into the TV Room. There's a bad guy. Dad shoots, misses. Somebody shoot at him. A shot cuts open his cheek and makes a huge hole into the wall where the girl is standing, she is down from the stairs.
+Father show them to get down.
-The girl look like OMFG WTF.
+They get down.
-Father take cover from a brown leather tv chair and put more ammo in shotgun. He shoot. He miss. He shoot again just to scare them off. They shoot at him. The leg of the tv chair goes into pieces from the shot. And the chair is now on three legs.
+The mother then goes to grab hold on to Dad. She doesn't want him to go. He goes anyways. He got to.
-A guy from behind hit him with a shovel in his head. He shoot this guys shovel when he is trying to do it again. The shovel bounces in bad guy head. Nice DONG! sound.
+Dad is going into the TV Room. There's a bad guy. Dad shoots, misses. Somebody shoot at him. A shot cuts open his cheek and makes a huge hole into the wall where the girl is standing next to mother.
-The father crawls up. He look at girl. He show to girl go away.
+The girl and mother look like OMFG WTF.
+
+FATHER
+Stay down!
+
+Father take cover from a brown leather tv chair and put more ammo in shotgun. He shoot. He miss. He shoot again just to scare them off. They shoot at him. The leg of the tv chair goes into pieces from one shot. Then the back of the chair. Three holes in that. Father manages to not get shot. The chair is now on three legs.
+
+A guy from behind Father hit him with a shovel in his head. He shoot this guys shovel when he is trying to do it again. The shovel bounces in bad guy head. Nice DONG! sound.
+
+The father crawl up. He look at girl. He nod. The girl does a Kung Foo move. She start running with the knife.
+
+Father grab bad guy arm. He swing him around, he down on floor, SMACK! GIRL stab him in heart. He go out. Girl go hide behind dad. Ok, there's at least two more. God job sweatheart. Dad give girl a kiss on the forehead.
+
+GIRL
+Anytime dad, anytime.
FATHER
(whisper)
-run, run!
+ok, go out through back window go check their back. See if you see something. Stay in the shadows, as you been thought. Come back report to me ok. only if it seem safe other you run away ok.
-They can hear that the bad guys has their mother and boy in another room. Father again. Hand sign to girl go away.
+They can hear that the bad guys has their mother and boy upstair. Father give hand sign to girl go.
FATHER
-Run!
+be the shadow.
+
+Predator music. Girl goes in the back of the downstair, there's a small window. She climb up to that window. Open and go out into the darkness.
+
+Father clear down stair TV room. And kid room. He open the Pannuhuone room. There's bad guy comming straight at him with an axe. He shot him down. He blast into two pieces. We dont see it but that what it sounded like.
+
+EXT. OUTSIDE
+
+The girl is outside by the shed. She notices soething. a fucking automatic rifle just standing there against shed wall. She OMFG.
-Father goes full Rambo Commando mode in the room where boy and mother is. Flying and shooting with his shotgun in slo-mo. BLAM! pump, BLAM! pump, BLAM! pump. Still in the air.
+She take of the gun silencer.
+
+INT. STAIRS
+
+Father going up stairs slowly commando style.
+
+INT. UPSTAIR
+
+Two bad guys have Mother and Son as hostige. They in the upstair tv room. Father comes upstair. He see the situation.
+
+Father put the gun down. Bad guys laughing. They point their gun at him. Just as they gonna blow him away. Automatic gunfire from outside breaking the window and kills one of the bad guys.
+
+EXT. HOUSE
+
+Girl shooting at one of bad guys through the window from outside. He is dancing.
+
+EXT. UPSTAIR
+
+Bad guy still dancing from all the bullets. His torsos just all blown up from the bullets. The other bad guy is still alive. Mother and son got down. Close up Father picks up his shotgun and shoot. He goes into full Rambo Commando mode. Jumps. Flying and shooting with his shotgun in slo-mo. BLAM! pump, BLAM! pump.
FATHER
AAaaargh!
-We hear shoting sound from pistol coming from the room father just jumped in. The girl still standin same location. We hear a body fall. There's near to near combat. WE hear mother and boy scream. THey hit boy with something. Sounded like an axe, I'm sorry, but that was how it sounded like. No sound anymore.
+We see the last bad guy shot one time up in the ceiling as he is shot dead into pieces by father.
+
+CLOSE UP father still in air. BLAM! pump, BLAM! pump. Still in the air.
+
+The girl still standin same location outside. We see her outside as we hear the dead bad guy fall to the floor. Body fall.
+
+Dad show to mother and son to stay down as he raises himself and clearing the room. ok. Mother and son CLOSE UP they get up.
+
+EXT. OUTSIDE
+
+The girl standing with the automatic rifle. Clear area with turning head scouting around. She nods to dad.
+
+INT. UPSTAIR
+
+Dad nods to her through the broken window.
+
+We hear somekinda device start to beep. One of bad guy have somkind explosion on him.
+
+Dad picks the bad guy up.
+
+FATHER
+(looking at girl outside)
+Run!
+
+EXT. OUTSIDE
+
+BIG BADA boom. House blow up.
+
+EXT. INSIDE
+
+There's near to near combat. WE hear mother and boy scream. THey hit boy with something. Sounded like an axe, I'm sorry, but that was how it sounded like. No sound anymore.
The girl is terrified. sHe hear somebody comming. A man come up to her. We dont see his face.
